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From the sound of your title these works are just bits and pieces of a much larger story, understandable. Although, it would have been nice to put the title somewhere, ...

Your piece was simple and was (from my knowledge) correctly formatted as a journal entry. As a journal or personal entry. You should try and show an honest side of ...

I'm interested in your story so you'll be seeing more of me. First your story is a bit crowded try and space out paragraphs that aren't related. Also try and ...

Your story is interesting and sound like it'd look cool as an anime or such. An issue is that while you're very good at dialogue, and the setting is obvious ...

This was very well written. I feel that you've put a lot of work into this story. The way the story is fast-paced isn't bad it understandable to the reader ...

Your title is very strong and evokes a curiosity which brings in readers, but the beginning of your story is hard to understand in the sense that I don't know ...

Your short passage is very well written it captures all the senses to draw the reader in to the world you've created. It evokes a calm and safe feeling. There ...

I feel that you've created a good atmosphere in you style of writing that makes the read want to continue to the next chapter, as I have been pulled. The ...

Normally I’m not interested in stories with little dialogue but your story genuinely hooked me, and it’s an interesting plot. Also this is my first time reviewing so disregard anything ...